Please help!

I'm interviewing for a writing job w/ a pointe shoe manufacturer. This is independent contract work. Part of the work will be writing for their catalog about each shoe model.

I've had ballet training, but started as an adult & never danced on pointe.

Would someone be willing to check my copy (1-2 short paragraphs), to see if there's anything important that should be addressed, or anything that's missing? Just want to make sure I've got my ducks all in a row.

Please PM me if you can help! I have to turn this around fast, so I'd need someone to look at this & give any feedback very quickly--probably today yet.